The average standard of people’s health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

It is argued that the people's
health
is more and
more lower
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lower
than in the future compared with people's
health
nowadays.
l
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L
totally agree with
this
statement. On the one hand, people nowadays are very busy with their
work
and family.
Firstly
, they
sometime
on certain occasions or in certain cases but not always
sometimes
feel stress
with
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in
their
work but
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work, but
they
can not
can not
cannot
live that they don't
work
. Most people
work
hard even overtime in order to earn money. So, they don't have much time to exercise
such
as play sports, do yoga or go to the gym.
Secondly
, a lot of family
use
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uses
the fast
food
and street
food
for
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in
their life.
Although
it's very
convenient but
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convenient, but
fast
food
or street
food
are not good for
health
.
On the other hand
, the environment is much worse day by day. The
first
reason is that the forest
on
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in
of
the world continued fell in a few
year
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years
ago and it will be
continue
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continued
decline in the
next
year later. If trees is chopped, the CO2 will be
increase
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increased
.
Also
, a lot of
factory
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factories
were built in order to serve people life but if the water waste and the garbage were not handled, it will be a source that will pollute the environment. That's why the average standard of people's will be lower. The
second
reason is that the vehicle of the world
also
increased
on
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in
the world, especially in the big city. In conclusion,
although
people in the
word
everything that exists anywhere
world
interested their
health but
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health, but
a lot of factors will be
decrease
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decreasing
the average standard of people's
health
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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