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Some consumers are increasingly choosing to buy goods that are produced in their local area, rather than imported goods. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or a negative trend?

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Nowadays,a big majority of individuals prefer to purchase
products
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 which are produced by locals from different regions rather than imported goods,I strongly support it for several reasons
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 as it is beneficial for local folks ,
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,it leads to progress and advancement of the country.In
this
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 essay,I will express both the negative and positive sides of them in the following paragraphs. On the one hand,
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,you support the people who are producing the national and regional
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,
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, those people need to be supported and encouraged to provide the rest of society's demands and necessities,
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,when a government starts to create and run different factories,it can bring lost of job vacancies for it is own individuals,including working in factories,hyper centres ,
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,it is huge merit that many firms and companies can have own materials that could not be found anywhere else.
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:Iran is a state
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 well known and famous for it is oil and gas and many petroleum
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 that not only it is beneficial for own state but it is an important good for many countries in all over the worlds.
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 , it will help your economy to be more independent since you can not always rely on other countries and the quality of their product. By creating local items, we have control over the quality of the
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 and their brand.
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,some public like to use many foreign facilities
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 as clothing ,smart electronic devices,cars etc,
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 :many public likes to use APPLE devices that are produced in the USA and items and brands have branches all over the world,
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,many people tend to purchase clothes and garment from famous brand
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 as ZARA,MANGO,H&M and so on . In conclusion :the trend of buying locally produced goods is largely advanteges for society and public, but there should be a balance between buying local things and other imported materials.

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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence, and that ideas follow logically from one another. This will help to improve the logical structure of your essay.
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Try to keep your sentences clear and concise to avoid confusion and maintain the strength of your arguments.
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You provided a complete response to the task by discussing both reasons for buying local products and considering whether this is a positive or negative trend.
coherence cohesion
Your essay includes a clear introduction and conclusion, framing your arguments well.
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Supported your main points with specific examples, such as mentioning Iran's oil industry.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • local economy
  • carbon footprint
  • sustainable consumption
  • supporting local businesses
  • community development
  • cultural heritage
  • self-sufficiency
  • environmental sustainability
  • imported goods
  • fresh produce
  • consumer preference
  • local producers
  • organic products
  • economic impact
  • carbon emissions
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