The average standard of people's health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Recently, there have been a lot of discussions about
health
and whether it is going to improve or not. In my opinion, I think that people will become unhealthier in the
future
than they are now. There are many reasons that support the idea of people becoming unhealthy in the
future
.
Firstly
, one reason is that of
food
. People tend to eat more fast
food
nowadays. They tend to treat themselves with sweets and chocolate whenever they want.
This
appears to be because people are busier now than they used to be. So, people don’t have a chance to cook or even learn the art of cookery.
Also
, having a lot of unhealthy
food
can lead to obesity and it could be a serious issue in the
future
. Another reason is that
technology
is developing everyday. Young people enjoy buying new gadgets and the latest devices.
This
has a negative impact on their
health
, especially when they enjoy video games. Spending long hours looking at a screen can lead to bad eyesight and obesity as well. Yet another reason is that laziness is a big issue. Different forms of
exercise
might disappear in the
future
because people don’t like sports.
Also
, people prefer spending most of their time on the internet and the internet is growing every single day. Other people might disagree and say that
health
will improve in the
future
. They believe that new sports and new ways to
exercise
will appear in the
future
.
However
, I don’t think it can happen
since
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for
the majority of people spend less time outdoors.
Moreover
, other people believe that
technology
will try and help people improve their
health
.
For example
, there have been some games released on the Wii console that makes people
exercise but
Accept comma addition
exercise, but
technology
is developing more in a negative way.
For instance
, many phone industries are developing new applications
everyday
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every day
and today’s generation likes to follow every trend.
This
prevents people to go outside to
exercise
. They like to spend more time on the internet downloading new programmes or reading
gossips
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gossip
about
celebraties
a widely known person
celebrities
.
This
affects people’s
health
badly. In conclusion, I believe that people’s
health
is affected negatively by fast
food
,
technology
and sports and it will be a problem in the
future
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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