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Many people go through life doing work that they hate or have no talent for. Why does this happen? What are the consequences of this situation? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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There is no denying the fact that the a need for jobs nowadays.
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 essay will discuss the reasons why people continue through life with jobs not adore them and the sequences of
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 with, there are many logical reasons for people to accept working in an unsuitable position.
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, the shortage of some specialities needs to
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 the demand for careers that can cover human and
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 lives needs.
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, some people may be under-qualified to be accepted in some positions.
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, experience plays an important role for recently graduated students these days.
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, a person who wishes to be a part of a company should have at least three years of experience with specialized certifications. In terms of the consequences,
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 situation may have some disadvantages
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 advantages. It is possible to say that one of the drawbacks is the employee will face stressful times as it will
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 with the level of hating his job.
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, the number of achievements will decrease with time.
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, the one who does not have a talent for one job will never have a passion to broaden his knowledge about it. In conclusion, there are many causes that lead to an
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 in the prevalence of
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 true that not all
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individuals have a passion to complete their studies and
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 their level of education with acceptance of low income to meet their dream goals.

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task achievement
Try to provide more specific examples to illustrate your points more vividly. This would help to strengthen your argument and make the essay more engaging.
coherence cohesion
Ensure smooth transitions between ideas or paragraphs, which can help improve the essay's flow and coherence.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, which are both important for a well-structured argument.
task achievement
You demonstrated a good understanding of the topic by discussing both the reasons and consequences effectively.
coherence cohesion
Your use of logical reasoning and examples provides a strong underpinning for your main arguments.

Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • career guidance
  • financial pressures
  • societal expectations
  • familial pressures
  • personal passion
  • job opportunities
  • unfulfilling work
  • fear of change
  • stable employment
  • career satisfaction
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