Some people say that advertising encourages us to buy things that we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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The explosion in advertising industry creates a question for many people about the ultimate aims of these advertisements. Whereas some people think that they often attract us buying things we don’t really need. I would argue that they help us to find items which can improve our standard of

life

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. On the one hand, almost advertising companies aims at the basic needs of

audience

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the audience

but some agencies do not.

Firstly

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, they use

eye-catching image

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an eye-catching image

and put it

everywhere which

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everywhere, which

everyone is able to see or use glamorous and successful people come discussions of their companies to make customers’ stable belief about their items, results in motivating consumers to buy goods impulsively.

Secondly

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, unwary children could be easily swayed by captivating advertisements, take the advantage of

this

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, lots of enterprises towards the target audiences

such

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as teenagers or children, and so they will put pressure on their parents to buy it though they don’t really need it.

On the other hand

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, it seems to me that advertising brings us many good choices in order to improve the quality of

life

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. They inform us meticulously about the choices we have especially in a modern business.

For instance

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, you want to buy a

refrigerator but

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refrigerator, but

you don’t have enough time to gain knowledge about technology items so you are able to access to electronic advertisements on websites and you will be listened to advices from sales staff,

therefore

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you can have the best production which they want.

Moreover

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, without advertising we would have less choice due to lacking of broaden about the pace of modern

life

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As a result

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, it’s so hard for us to enjoy a comfortable

life

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, which almost people need. In conclusion, while advertising

often make

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often makes

us buy unnecessary goods, it seems to me that advertising

gradually increase

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gradually increases

the convenience of our

life

Use synonyms

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

303 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

encourage
persuade
manipulative
unnecessary
excessive
artificial needs
desires
consumers
oversaturation
impulse buying
financial problems
inform
educate
features
benefits
innovations
raise awareness
social issues
positive behavior
enrich
well-being

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