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Some people believe that children should be allowed to stay at home and play until they are six or seven years old. Others believe that it is important for young children to go to school as soon as possible. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #children #home #six #seven #years #school
Nowadays many
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Nowadays, many
 parents often wonder if they should allow their children to stay at
home
 until they are old enough to study at primary
school
 or let them go to
school
 as soon as impossible
.
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.
 Whereas, I would argue that sending children to
school
 as early is the best choice. On the one hand, the children who allowed to stay at
home
 have a big amount of time to gain physical development. The reason can be put forward to explain
this
phenomenal
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phenomenon
 that they don’t have to catch up with the lectures at the
school
 as well as be anxious due to continuous assessment or exams. In Finland which has been known as the best academic education country, the inhabitants are famous for maxims
such
 as “ Let the children be themselves” or “ The children’s business is playing and playing”.
Moreover
, if the student are not
be
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being
 obliged to go to
school
 early, they can learn a lot in the
school
 of hard knocks or improve society skills
such
 as communicate skill which schools never teach them.
On the other hand
, it seems to me that letting the children attend to
school
 early is essential.
First
, they decrease the over-dependence on their parents because their parents are not able to be with them high and low to look after them, they have to prepare almost things they need
such
 as books or breakfast.
Secondly
,
such
 children can have the capability of having a good grasp of curriculum and pass the formal examination easily than others who stayed at
home
 for ages, since these students have been exposed to studying for a long time which creates a good studying
habit
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habits
. In conclusion, while allowing the children to stay at
home
 does have some benefits, it seems to me that the advantages of
a
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an
 early education for children is a better choice.
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