Some people believe that children should be allowed to stay at home and play until they are six or seven years old. Others believe that it is important for young children to go to school as soon as possible. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, many

parents often wonder if they should allow their children to stay at

home

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until they are old enough to study at primary

school

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or let them go to

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as soon as impossible

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Whereas, I would argue that sending children to

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as early is the best choice. On the one hand, the children who allowed to stay at

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have a big amount of time to gain physical development. The reason can be put forward to explain

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that they don’t have to catch up with the lectures at the

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as well as be anxious due to continuous assessment or exams. In Finland which has been known as the best academic education country, the inhabitants are famous for maxims

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as “ Let the children be themselves” or “ The children’s business is playing and playing”.

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, if the student are not

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obliged to go to

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early, they can learn a lot in the

school

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of hard knocks or improve society skills

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as communicate skill which schools never teach them.

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, it seems to me that letting the children attend to

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early is essential.

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, they decrease the over-dependence on their parents because their parents are not able to be with them high and low to look after them, they have to prepare almost things they need

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as books or breakfast.

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children can have the capability of having a good grasp of curriculum and pass the formal examination easily than others who stayed at

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for ages, since these students have been exposed to studying for a long time which creates a good studying

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habits

. In conclusion, while allowing the children to stay at

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does have some benefits, it seems to me that the advantages of

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early education for children is a better choice.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

312 words

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Some people believe that children should be allowed to stay at home and play until they are six or seven years old. Others believe that it is important for young children to go to school as soon as possible. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

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