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PLASTIC SHOPPING BAGS CONTRIBUTE POLLUTION OF LAND AND SEA, opinion

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These days, the issue of
plastic
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 bags is widely debated in society. In my personal opinion, manufacturing of
plastic
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 bags should be abolished due to several reasons. One of the main justifications behind my belief is the fact that,
plastic
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 bags are
nondegradable
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non degradable
 waste.
Plastic
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 bags pollute environment due to the carelessness of people, who do not separate their waste and,
thus
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, bags cannot be recycled.
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,
plastic
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 waste will be in the ground for centuries. Another factor that supports my point of view is the idea that a huge number of animals and fish have been damaged by
plastic
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 bags.
Oceans
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The oceans
are full of
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are full of plastic and inhabitants of water trying
try full of plastic and inhabitants of water
are full of plastic and inhabitants of water try
plastic
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 and inhabitants of water try to eat it and so, die, it is one of the reasons why many species are endangered now. The case of ocean tortoises is a pertinent example of
this
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 phenomena, when many of them died because of
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bags
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bag
 consumption.
However
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, on the other side of the argument, many people believe that cheap cost of
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bags
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bag
 manufacturing, its strength and multiuse make
plastic
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 bag an ideal bag for domestic use. If people used
plastic
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 bags many times and
then
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 recycled it, there would be no problem to worry at all. All things considered, I believe that
plastic
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 bags are
danger
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dangerous
 for our environment and
nature whereas
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nature, whereas
 others claim that
plastic
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 bags are the best choice but should be used correctly. Taking all points into consideration, I am firmly of the opinion that
plastic
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 bags should be forbidden
for
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to
 manufacture and sale.
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