Modern technology is now very common in most work places. How do you think this has changed the way we work? Do you think there are disadvantages to relying too much on technology?
Most workplaces are affected by modern
technology
nowadays. In my opinion, this
not only can help in an increase in the production of goods but also
revolutionised some industries greatly, nevertheless
there are a few disadvantages when these machines are relied on heavily.
Firstly
, it is obvious that modern machines which are used in factories may produce goods faster than humans. In other words
, more products are produced in an hour which may lead to a significant reduction in costs and, as a result
, cheaper products. For example
, one drawing machine may draw 1000 chairs in one hour, whereas
a human spends days or weeks. Meanwhile, modern technology
is used by manufacturers in order to reduce mistakes which are often made by people.
Secondly
, modern inventions certainly have helped some industries, especially the entertainment industry to reach another level. That is
to say, nobody can imagine a movie without a computer graphic which is used so as to make a film more exciting. Similarly
, computers make production cheaper while
using natural scenery is very expensive. For instance
, almost the whole movie may be recorded in front of a green screen which requires only one pavilion in any country, nevertheless
, recording of nature requires all crew to be transported to a target place, such
as a city, mountain or sea.
On the other hand
, involving a lot of modern technology
in workplaces may cause a rise in the unemployment rate because more and more work may be done by machines. At present, because of the development of cybernetics, most industries have downsized, and therefore
, many people have been laid off. Besides
that, in some cases, manufacturing may be stopped if something goes wrong with a power supply. Hence
, in this
case, human roles are still essential.
In conclusion, although
using modern technology
in most workplaces increases productivity and quality, it may cause some serious problems.Submitted by s_syedy on
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