The gap between rich and poor is increasing. What problems does it cause? What solutions can you suggest?

Money is creating
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Creating money is
a barrier in human’s communicate. Nowadays, people tend to have a different view of both the
wealth
and the poor, which cause many drawbacks. In my opinion,
this
is a negative development and it should be stopped as soon as possible. The discrimination between rich and poor has brought many different consequences for human’s life. In fact, it is happening in many undeveloped countries
such
as India. Obviously,
this
gap will create
humans
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human
inequality problems in society. The
wealth
seems not to respect the poor and always reject their ideas even those are good.
Therefore
, it will create bad behaviour in
children
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child
child's
children's
development, because they love to mimic an
adult’s
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adult
action.
In addition
, inequity
also
a lack of
sympathy
between the people in society nowadays. Sadly, it happens to most of the youth who come from a rich family. As a human being, showing our
sympathy
is showing our morals.
However
, everything has a solution and so do the unfairness among rich and poor people. The most important thing to break
this
barrier down is to let the
wealth aware
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wealth, aware
of their
sympathy
by showing them how hard the poor live every day. In fact, in many countries
such
as Singapore, the government asks for the salary tax every month. That cash will be invested in the build-up community centres or donating to help unlucky people. From my view,
this
such
a good way for the rich to show their morals as well as
sympathy
to others.
In addition
, rich people should get in touch more with the
poor so
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poor, so
they will understand more about the value of cash. To conclude, no one or law against humans to be rich.
However
, the value of cash is not being aware of.
Therefore
, the barrier between rich and poor still there and hard to break down. I appeal the
wealth
should be more
sympathy
and respect the poor, because they
also
humans and they deserve to be better. I believe that kindness, love and morals will stand forever.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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