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More people are spending their free time viewing movies, why is this? Is it ​good or bad?

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Watching films is becoming
favorite
something regarded with special favor or liking
favourite
 past
time
 for numerous people
nowadays which
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nowadays, which
 is mainly due to inexpensive applications and ease of accessibility which in turns leads to social and health-related consequences. There are numerous reasons for people to watch movies in their leisure
time
.
To begin
 with, sundry mobile and web applications
such
 as Amazon Prime, Netflix, Hot-star to name but a few, provide latest movies and shows with a greater diversity of genres, irrespective of any language barrier.
Moreover
, the all-
time
 availability of contents online makes people addicted to watching their
favorites
something regarded with special favor or liking
favourites
favourite
 repeatedly. Another reason is the high-speed internet data and hassle-free connectivity that aids to watch films promptly
Subsequently
, several producers understand the current taste of common masses, and thereby, produces movies with interesting topics,
for instance
, political drama, thrillers and real life-threatening incidents, which attracts more people to watch during their recess
time
. Watching movies
is considered
Suggestion
are considered
 to be a passive activity to spend valuable
time
. Because of
this
 drift towards movies, people tend to lose their social life significantly, which reduces their interaction with family members, friends, and
neighbors
a person who lives (or is located) near another
neighbours
 and as a consequence, people
among
Suggestion
between
 local communities are no longer forming a close and supportive relationship. Another detrimental outcome of watching movies for long hours is rising obesity in youngsters making them lethargic and typically apathetic towards any potential physical
endeavor
a purposeful or industrious undertaking (especially one that requires effort or boldness)
endeavour
. As an illustration, every 1 in 5 children in the US is obese owing to inactive actions like watching movies or series in their vacation period. To summarize, watching movies in the leisure period has an overall deleterious impact on people as it is a worthless activity.
Hence
, screen
time
 should be diminished, and leisure
time
 should be utilized for more productive purposes.
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