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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious problems as well as practical problems. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

#country #language
It is an ongoing trend witnessed around the world that many people travel overseas for either work or education.
Its
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It
 is agreed that linguistic barrier is one the serious issues faced by
such
 people. Feelings of loneliness, unacceptability at workplace and difficulties in expression are few challenges endured by immigrants and students who travel to far off lands in the hope of doing great.
Language
 is an indispensable tool of communication. Learning a new
language
 requires years of practice to attain fluency and command. Inability to speak in the native/local
language
 impacts the confidence of a newly joined employees or students. It makes them feel
unwelcomed
not welcome; not giving pleasure or received with pleasure
unwelcome
 and are
also
 misunderstood by the employer and colleagues.
Moreover
, failure of verbal expression gradually secludes them from the social group which at times leads to loneliness
and soon depression
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and depression soon
. It
also
 creates trouble with the government officials and working.
For instance
, a study done by UNESCO showed Sydney as the
second
 most
unwelcoming
 city towards immigrants.
Furthermore
, students who find difficulty in comprehending
the
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the language to perform
language
 perform poorly at the university
level which
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level, which
 often leads them to be bullied and mocked by fellow classmates. Many people who find the
language
 complicated to speak and understand face hardships in
find locating
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finding, locating
finding locating
 areas or using the public transport. Chances of getting robbed and tricked by the local goons or shopkeepers, who take advantage of
this
 inability, are high. One of my friends who went to Paris for graduation was deceived by her own classmates and was strangled at a dingy place. In conclusion, learning the formal
language
 is highly recommended
to
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for
 people travelling or immigrating as
this
 can enhance their chances of adapting to the
new country well
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new country as well
. Know-how of the
language
 can cause not just social troubles but can
also
 have practical implications on living and lifestyle of people.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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