Many doctors say that people in today's world do not do enough physical exercise. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions are there to this problem?

The table data

illustrates

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illustrate

the proportion of students attended the four different secondary schools (Specialist, Grammar, Voluntary-Controlled and Community Schools) in the year 2000, 2005 and 2009. Overall, it is obvious from the data that the number of students attended the Community school dramatically increased and present rate decreased drastically in Voluntary-controlled schools over the given period of nine years. The former can be ranked number one in 2009 and Specialist Schools became the least popular among mentioned schools. In detail, 12percent of students were attending the Community schools in the year 2000, which became more than double in 2005 and 58% present was recorded in 2009. In

conversely

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conversation

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, Voluntary-controlled Schools that had 20% attendance in 2009 that far less as compared to statistics recorded back in 2000 that was 52% for the same category of schools.

On the other hand

, the attendees of Specialist Schools were only two

per cent

a proportion in relation to a whole (which is usually the amount per hundred)

percent

less than the Grammar schools in the year2009 but in 2000 former school had exactly half the number of

student

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students

than the later one that was 12% and 24% respectively.

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