Although you have never formally studied computing, you have always been interested in computers. You have just read about a computer course that really interests you, but it is only for people who have completed an elementary course. Write a letter to the college enrolment officer. In your letter explain why you are writing describe your circumstances ask if a special exception can be made for you so you can enrol in the course

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Dear Mr. Shen, I hope you are well when you are receiving my letter. My name is Ahad Saud, may you know me by my sister Sarah. She is a student in college with a computing major. The reason why I am writing to you is that I have just read about a computer

course

which really interests me.

But unfortunately

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, it is only for students who pass an elementary

course

However

, my sister took

this

course

two months ago and I was attending the online classes with her.

Therefore

, I have information

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and passion and I want to take

this

course

with you. I was wondering if you could do a special exemption and allow me to register for

this

class, or if you want to take a test for me to get an official certificate for the elementary

course

, I am more than welcome to take it. I look forward to receiving your response. Yours faithfully, Ahad Saud

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task achievement

Make sure to clearly explain your relevant experience and skill with specific examples to strengthen your case.

coherence cohesion

Use clear topic sentences at the beginning of each paragraph to enhance logical flow.

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The letter is polite and uses a suitable writing tone throughout.

coherence cohesion

The greeting and closing are appropriately structured.

coherence cohesion

The main points are covered, making the letter coherent and easy to follow.

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3Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Grammar mistakes
 

8 paragraphs

160 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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