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Although you have never formally studied computing, you have always been interested in computers. You have just read about a computer course that really interests you, but it is only for people who have completed an elementary course. Write a letter to the college enrolment officer. In your letter explain why you are writing describe your circumstances ask if a special exception can be made for you so you can enrol in the course

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Dear Mr. Shen, I hope you are well when you are receiving my letter. My name is Ahad Saud, may you know me by my sister Sarah. She is a student in college with a computing major. The reason why I am writing to you is that I have just read about a computer
course
 which really interests me.
But unfortunately
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, it is only for students who pass an elementary
course
.
However
, my sister took
this
course
 two months ago and I was attending the online classes with her.
Therefore
, I have information
,
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 and passion and I want to take
this
course
 with you. I was wondering if you could do a special exemption and allow me to register for
this
 class, or if you want to take a test for me to get an official certificate for the elementary
course
, I am more than welcome to take it. I look forward to receiving your response. Yours faithfully, Ahad Saud
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task achievement
Make sure to clearly explain your relevant experience and skill with specific examples to strengthen your case.
coherence cohesion
Use clear topic sentences at the beginning of each paragraph to enhance logical flow.
task achievement
The letter is polite and uses a suitable writing tone throughout.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are appropriately structured.
coherence cohesion
The main points are covered, making the letter coherent and easy to follow.
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