Some people say that holding sport competitions cause many troubles, others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

There is no doubt that sports play
significant role
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a significant role
in
bulding
a structure that has a roof and walls and stands more or less permanently in one place
building
nation’s identity.
However
, it is a debatable topic that whether a country should host a sporting event. While some believe that it does more harm than good, I agree with those who argue that these events must be welcome because of their considerable advantages.
To begin
with drawbacks, it is clear that handsome amount of public money is spent
for
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in
organizing these events. For
developing country
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developing countries
a developing country
like India who is combating poverty, low-literacy and
mal-nutrition
a state of poor nutrition; can result from insufficient or excessive or unbalanced diet or from inability to absorb foods
malnutrition
and other problems.
it
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It
is totally inappropriate to
spent
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spend
huge money on
such
fency
imagine; conceive of; see in one's mind
fancy
events.
For example
, in 2010 Delhi
common wealth
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Commonwealth
commonwealth
games, the government used over 100 million rupees for managing events, city infrastructure beautification and foreign delegates hospitality while the state farmers were dealing with worst water shortage crisis.
Thus
, these expensive sporting events consume
big chunk
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a big chunk
of government
budget which
Accept comma addition
budget, which
can be used for other development programmes,
therefore
they should be avoided.
However
, despite organizing these
event
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events
are costly affair, the virtu they bring along can not be ignored. Sportsmen, journalists and tourists around the world come
for
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to
these events. While their visit, they interact with
locals
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the locals
, understand culture, make friends, and
finally
it results in cordial relationship with foreign communities.
Additionally
, it not only thrusts tourism, but
also
opens
new business horizon
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a new business horizon
new business horizons
the new business horizon
in
internation market
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the international market
international market
international markets
International market
which ultimately accelerate economic growth.
For instance
, Indian GDP increased 0.5% in
subsequent year
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subsequent years
the subsequent year
of hosting 2015 cricket world cup. All in all, these sporting events glorify
overall image
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the overall image
of
country
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the country
a country
. In conclusion,
although
organizing
such
competitions are expensive, I feel that their contribution to
economy
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the economy
,
internation
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international
relationship and tourism are noteworthy and government should
counduct
direct the course of; manage or control
conduct
contact
them as and when feasible.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

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  • To conclude
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  • Finally
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  • In general

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