Some people say that holding sport competitions cause many troubles, others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #sport #competitions #troubles

There is no doubt that sports play

significant role

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a significant role

bulding

a structure that has a roof and walls and stands more or less permanently in one place

building

nation’s identity.

However

, it is a debatable topic that whether a country should host a sporting event. While some believe that it does more harm than good, I agree with those who argue that these events must be welcome because of their considerable advantages.

To begin

with drawbacks, it is clear that handsome amount of public money is spent

for

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organizing these events. For

developing country

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developing countries

a developing country

like India who is combating poverty, low-literacy and

mal-nutrition

a state of poor nutrition; can result from insufficient or excessive or unbalanced diet or from inability to absorb foods

malnutrition

and other problems.

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is totally inappropriate to

spent

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spend

huge money on

such

fency

imagine; conceive of; see in one's mind

fancy

events.

For example

, in 2010 Delhi

common wealth

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Commonwealth

commonwealth

games, the government used over 100 million rupees for managing events, city infrastructure beautification and foreign delegates hospitality while the state farmers were dealing with worst water shortage crisis.

Thus

, these expensive sporting events consume

big chunk

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a big chunk

of government

budget which

Accept comma addition

budget, which

can be used for other development programmes,

therefore

they should be avoided.

However

, despite organizing these

event

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events

are costly affair, the virtu they bring along can not be ignored. Sportsmen, journalists and tourists around the world come

for

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these events. While their visit, they interact with

locals

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the locals

, understand culture, make friends, and

finally

it results in cordial relationship with foreign communities.

Additionally

, it not only thrusts tourism, but

also

opens

new business horizon

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a new business horizon

new business horizons

the new business horizon

internation market

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the international market

international market

international markets

International market

which ultimately accelerate economic growth.

For instance

, Indian GDP increased 0.5% in

subsequent year

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subsequent years

the subsequent year

of hosting 2015 cricket world cup. All in all, these sporting events glorify

overall image

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the overall image

country

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the country

a country

. In conclusion,

although

organizing

such

competitions are expensive, I feel that their contribution to

economy

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the economy

internation

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international

relationship and tourism are noteworthy and government should

counduct

direct the course of; manage or control

conduct

contact

them as and when feasible.

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11Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
22Grammar mistakes
 

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Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

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Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

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Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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