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Universities should accept equal number of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Education is the utmost right of every individual and no rule should cause one been refrained from the same.
However
, these
days many
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days, many
 universities are planning or has started the intake of equal number of male and female students in every stream.
Such
step
 has been equally appreciated and criticized by the people on the larger platform. Since I agree
to
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with
this
 thought to a limited extent, In
this
 essay, I am going to discuss the both sides of the statement and its impacts. To start with, In many nations like
Pakistan where
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Pakistan, where
womens
an adult female person (as opposed to a man)
women
 are still limited to household work and are not allowed to go out of home. And men
usually acts
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usually act
 as the protagonist and performs all the decision making.
Such
step
 will help in
upliftment
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the upliftment
 of
women
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woman's
women's
 condition in the country, which in turn will help the society as well.
In addition
, there are many subjects which are being stereotyped based on gender.
For example
, cooking is still considered as females work and driving is men's. With
such
 rule
wrt
(law) a legal document issued by a court or judicial officer
writ
world
 gender equality in
opting subject
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the opting subject
opting subjects
 in universities, it will allow people from different background to try and excel in
such
 fields.
On the contrary
,
such
 regulations may cause a discrimination where the deserving candidates are left out and less deserving ones
gets
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get
 the position. In populous countries like India, where universities offers limited seats with respect to number of applicants; it becomes unfair for those who are better in
accolades but
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accolades, but
 due to
such
 norms they have been discarded for admission to those universities. All in all, educational establishments
has already started
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have already started
 or many are still considering giving
weightage
 to gender equality in every subject. By introduction of
such
step
, it will give an edge to the society by providing an equal
chances
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chance
 to all genders during subject selection. Whereas, it may lead to inequality with meritorious students and undeserving ones may flourish.
Hence
, it is important
that
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that such a step
such
step
 should be rationalised before implementation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender equality
  • diversity
  • inclusivity
  • balanced
  • learning environment
  • opportunities
  • perspectives
  • gender stereotypes
  • fairness
  • equal opportunities
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