Many people believe that social networking side like ( facebook ) have had a use negative impact on both individuals and society .to what extend do you agree?

In order to, some individuals think that utilize of social media
such
as
facebook
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Facebook
,
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,
Instagram and twitter have a detrimental effect on humans and
society
.
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I agree with the statement
.
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I would discuss about
this
in following paragraphs.
To begin
with, the
first
and proponent new of that so net side
have
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has
myriad uncooperative reasons behind it. The main cause is
waste
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a waste
of
time
. Nowadays
time
is crucial for
everyone some
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everyone, some
human being are misspent their hours on these sides. Which is not appropriate for their career and
society
.
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.
If they dissipated
time
by these sites it would be difficult for
successful life
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a successful life
.
moreover
in addition
Moreover
,
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,
on social networking
sites some
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sites, some
news and
rumors
gossip (usually a mixture of truth and untruth) passed around by word of mouth
rumours
are fake and they counterfeit reports mislead the people as well as
society
.
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.
furthermore personal
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Furthermore, personal
Furthermore personal
martial is not safe on
internet
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the internet
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few
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Few
other mankind's misuse the private data.
for
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For
instance in
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instance, in
india
a republic in the Asian subcontinent in southern Asia; second most populous country in the world; achieved independence from the United Kingdom in 1947
India
Bollywood actress Kareena
kapoor
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Kapoor
private account was hacked by
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
person. It was used by other and spread wrong information about her
.
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.
she
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She
complaint
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complained
complains
against of criminal.
As a result
,
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,
it
also create
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also creates
has also created
crime
.
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.
These sites are not safe for
everyone even
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everyone, even
for
celebrity
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celebrities
a celebrity
.
In addition
procrastination is another negative impact on
society
and mankind life
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.
whom
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Whom
human spent their
time
on websites and delay their work which is adverse for
society
.
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.
they
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They
addicted by social media. They are less attention on their work. In the conclusion, the social networking sites are convenient for
everyone
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everyone, however
however
it should be used in limit. It should be mostly
use
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used
for suitable work
.
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.
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