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Advertising is all around us, it is an unavoidable part of everyone’s life. Some people say that advertising is a positive part of our lives while others say it is a negative one. Discuss both views and include your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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These days, advertisements in the form of T.V commercials, and social media paid content have become a new norm to send a message or sell products. The enormous impact of advertising has triggered a new debate questioning its positive and negative effects on individual
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 and life. In my opinion, despite some negligible drawbacks, advertisements have played an important role in bringing some positive changes in our lives.
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 essay will illustrate some of the possible drawbacks and many benefits of advertisements in our lives. On the one hand, beginning with the viewpoint of proponents, advertisements are an effective tool to bring many important cultural and social changes and breaking the stereotypes in any society. They
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 argue that advertising can trigger
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 society.
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, the Pakistan government -in a bid to curb the menace of Plastic pollution-is running a media campaign to encourage people to slash the use of single-use plastic bags. Not only it has brought a positive outcome in a relatively short period of
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 helped the government to spend less on recycling.
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, advertising can be an important platform to send a public message and help fight national issues like poverty, corruption, and pollution.
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, it is
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 argued by some that commercial advertisements being run by private organizations are forcing people to unnecessarily spend money on buying new products.
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, evidence suggests that people who want to show off their wealth often do
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 by buying the latest mobile phones and advertisements were found to be the leading cause
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. Another negative impact of advertising is a waste of time and resources.
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Indeed, many
 businesses in a bid to compete and outdo their rivals are spending a lot on unnecessary advertisements which have resulted in cost escalation.
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, it wastes valuable time of viewers who should only be shown relevant content on media. In a conclusion, having discussed both sides, in spite of few possible drawbacks, I believe that overall advertising has changed our lives in a positive manner and could be used to deliver a message to combat issues harmful for society
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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