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Topic: It is better for college students to live far away from home than live at home with their parents . Do you agree or disagree .

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There has been a topic of debate as to whether it is better for students to live independently away from their parents whilst studying at university
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, some conservative people
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oppose
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 Idea
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 I firmly support it
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 In many Asian countries
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 as India
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Vietnam traditional values of strong family bond
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play
 a significant role in the life of youth.
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Children
 remain under the surveillance of their parents during student life.
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 helps preventing them from getting into bad company
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 diverting from their path of education.
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I suspect
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 brings more bad
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then
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than
 good
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Students those who
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Those students who
 stay away from their homes learn to become financially independent at a very young age.
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 practice is common in western countries like US and UK
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Independence from parents is largely
excepted
generally approved or compelling recognition
accepted
expected
 and encouraged
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Children
starts
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start
 earning at
very young age
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a very young age
very young ages
 to
met
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meet
 out their economic liabilities
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Staying away from home not only brings financial
independence but
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independence, but
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 gives tact of survival to the students
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The independent children develop
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the key elements of self confidence in the
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 which is
condidered
carefully weighed
considered
 to be
necessary element
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a necessary element
 for student life
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Above all
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premier colleges and universities are not necessarily situated near to the homes of students
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And
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 is better for students
to stay
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staying
 away from homes in order to get
education
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an education
 from
renowned university
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renowned universities
a renowned university
 and get better placement
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 which is the ultimate goal of education
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 In conclusion
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I do consider that it important that children remain under the supervision of parents
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staying away from home helps students to become more confident and self reliant
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Thus
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 helping them to develop as much better individual in
future
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the future
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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