Topic: It is better for college students to live far away from home than live at home with their parents . Do you agree or disagree .

There has been a topic of debate as to whether it is better for students to live independently away from their parents whilst studying at university
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However
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oppose
this
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I firmly support it
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In many Asian countries
such
as India
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Vietnam traditional values of strong family bond
plays
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play
a significant role in the life of youth.
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Children
remain under the surveillance of their parents during student life.
This
helps preventing them from getting into bad company
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diverting from their path of education.
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I suspect
this
brings more bad
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than
good
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Students those who
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Those students who
stay away from their homes learn to become financially independent at a very young age.
This
practice is common in western countries like US and UK
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Independence from parents is largely
excepted
generally approved or compelling recognition
accepted
expected
and encouraged
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Children
starts
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start
earning at
very young age
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a very young age
very young ages
to
met
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meet
out their economic liabilities
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Moreover
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Staying away from home not only brings financial
independence but
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independence, but
also
gives tact of survival to the students
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The independent children develop
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the key elements of self confidence in the
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which is
condidered
carefully weighed
considered
to be
necessary element
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a necessary element
for student life
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Above all
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premier colleges and universities are not necessarily situated near to the homes of students
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And
this
is better for students
to stay
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staying
away from homes in order to get
education
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an education
from
renowned university
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renowned universities
a renowned university
and get better placement
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which is the ultimate goal of education
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In conclusion
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I do consider that it important that children remain under the supervision of parents
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However
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staying away from home helps students to become more confident and self reliant
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Thus
helping them to develop as much better individual in
future
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the future
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