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some people think that it is more beneficial to take part in sports which are played in teams, like football, while other people think that taking part in individual sports, like tennis or swimming is better. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

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Playing sports can bring plethora benefit to
an
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a
person
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 despite of the fact that whether it is
team
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 sports or an individual game. Some people think that
team
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 sports can have more advantages than individual sports.
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 essay will discuss why
team
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 sport is more beneficial than the
other but
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other, but
 why single
player
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 is less when compared.
Team
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 sports like football,
basketball etc
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basketball, etc.
basketball etc.
 can help each individual to understand the importance of each
player
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 and unity. Without unity and strength, the
team
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 cannot achieve its goal.
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 helps the
person
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 to build his moral values in
game
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the game
 as well as in his life.
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, In football all players play for the benefit of the
team
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.
Inorder
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In order
 to do that, the players have to be united and be selfless to pass on the ball to score the winning point. Qualities like these makes the
person
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 in helping his mind to be selfless and teaches him the importance of unity.
On the other hand
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, individual sports has
it
it is
it's
 own pros and cons. Sports like tennis and swimming helps the
player
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 to think of his own victory.
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 eventually makes him to
loof
a characteristic state or mode of living
life
 after his own family, his
jon
the principal activity in your life that you do to earn money
job
gun
gown
 and his happiness which is the result of the way he was bought up because of his sports. The mentality to care for others is reduced
in
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to
 them.
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, if a tennis
player
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 loses his game, the
player
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's emotion can be clearly seen in
form
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the form
 of aggression or sad, he cannot share his loss to anyone.
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 could lead him to face his problem alone in life as well. So they tend not to depend on another
person
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 when they are in trouble, they have the courage to face it alone. In my opinion, every
sports
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sport
 has
it
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 own positive and negative side. When compared
team
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 sports can help in shaping a
person
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 for
better socitey
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a better society
better society
better security
 while individual lacks in it.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cooperation
  • team spirit
  • sense of belonging
  • community
  • leadership
  • trust
  • collective responsibility
  • dependency
  • self-reliance
  • self-discipline
  • goal setting
  • tailored development
  • flexibility
  • social support
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