Some people think that government is wasting money on arts and that this money could be better spent somewhere elsewhere. To what extant do you agree with this view.

Arts having a distinctive place in the evolution of human history. In contemporary
time
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times
, governments are spending money on
arts
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the arts
in
varied
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variable
proportion while
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proportion, while
some people argue that it should be utilized for other better means. In my opinion, I strongly believe that the government needs to invest a balanced amount
on
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of
arts. Building arts monument can help in developing robust intellectual society because it allows people to critically
analyze
consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
analyse
the philosophical aspect of arts and advancing philosophical thought process. Arts contribution in developing the current world is enormous and ancient history had been depicted through artistic design, stone crafting and erecting
marvelous
extraordinarily good or great; used especially as an intensifier
marvellous
monuments.
For example
, Egypt’s great pyramid which shows engineering acumen at the same time artistic prowess for generations to learn. Arts help
not only preserving
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doesn't only preserve
don't only preserve
the
knowledge but
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knowledge, but
contribute significantly in seminal hypothesis on
subject
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the subject
a subject
. Even though some section of society
argue
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argues
that spending on
arts
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the arts
is squandering the money, it helps in numerous way which we cannot realize it’s monitory benefit instantly. One of the critical examples was from the painting of Mona Lisa by da Vinci which had attracted astonishing attention even after centuries with
scholar
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scholarly
articles, books and hypothesis are built in order to explain the painting; it is one of the critically discussed works done by any artist in the world. In my concluding remarks, I firmly believe that
arts
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art's
contribution in modern society far more advanced and we need to provide an ecosystem where it can be promoted, debated and supported in the best possible way.

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