Some people think that the teenagers should concentrate on all subjects at school. Others believe that teenagers should focus on the subject they are best at or they are most interested in. To what extent do you agree?

While it is thought that adolescents ought to focus on a broad range of school subjects, others feel it would be better for them to concentrate only on chosen subjects. I believe the number of subjects they study should depend on their
age
. One reason adolescents from around the
age
of 13 to 17 ought to focus on learning as many different subjects as possible is that they are too immature to make serious decisions that will affect their future. By studying various subjects, they will develop a clearer understanding of their skills and interests, which often change as a child ages.
Secondly
, teenagers need to vary what they learn to help them develop into well rounded adults.
For example
, they need
sport to encourage
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sport, encouraging
sport encouraging
health, they need maths to be able to perform simple arithmetic in life, and they need languages to help them learn communication. At a young
age they
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age, they
are not mature enough to be responsible for their own development.
However
, by the
age
of 18, adolescents know not only what subjects they most enjoy or excel at, but
also
which subjects are most useful for their future prospects in life. For
this
reason, the majority of university applicants are 18 years old, and they are eager to engage more deeply in specific subject matter.
Furthermore
, their ability to concentrate on one specific subject and study in depth is fully established at that
age
, unlike when they were younger.
Lastly
, older adolescents
have
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has
the ability to manage their own schedule and can take responsibility for continuing art or sport as hobbies. To conclude, younger teenagers are not ready to specialise and require a broad framework of subjects to help them develop, but at the
age
of 18,
this
is no longer the case.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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