Some people think certain prisoners should be made to do unpaid community work instead of being put behind bars. To what extent do you agree?

There was a raging discussion
last
week on sentencing reforms
over
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after
the release of a juvenile murderer. It ignited a debate on whether some people should be forced to do unpaid labour
instead
of rotting in prisons. Some activists believe that it is the only right thing to do while the public sentiment seems to be swaying on the other side.
However
the reality is a bit complex.
Firstly
,
success
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the success
of any prison sentence would be measured in one thing, non-repetition of crime, especially the ones for which he had been convicted for, after he/ she had completed the jail term. For
this
repetition of crime to subside, reformation of the jailed should be considered. Keeping people behind the bars hardly achieves
this
objective. If they were ordered to work during their term, they would learn some vocational courses which would help them live a decent living and it earns them respect in the society.
Secondly
, prisoners, especially those who were convicted
for
Suggestion
of
petty crime are
also
humans and should be treated that way. It is believed that incarcerations help in creating bad company, converting small offenders into rogue elements,
thus
should be avoided.
On the other
hand vocational
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hand, vocational
workshops will create a healthy and productive relationship which they could leverage in the future.
However not
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However, not
all criminals should be treated the same way. Violent and repeat
offendors
a person who transgresses moral or civil law
offenders
should not be shown any lenience as a token of
juscice
the quality of being just or fair
justice
to the victims.
Otherwise
, it will lower the morale of the
society but
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society, but
boosts that of the criminals. In conclusion, I opine that for small or one-time
criminls
someone who has committed a crime or has been legally convicted of a crime
criminals
, a lenient and productive verdict should be awarded
instead
of archaic torturous sentences.
This
is not only because of human rights
concerns but
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concerns, but
also
to create a healthier society.
Also
, hard work sentences improves the skills they need to survive
post
the time that has elapsed
past
their release.
However
, those who commit abhorrent crimes
shuold
expresses an emotional, practical, or other reason for doing something
should
not be treated the same way.
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