Some people think certain prisoners should be made to do unpaid community work instead of being put behind bars. To what extent do you agree?

There was a raging discussion
week on sentencing reforms
the release of a juvenile murderer. It ignited a debate on whether some people should be forced to do unpaid labour
of rotting in prisons. Some activists believe that it is the only right thing to do while the public sentiment seems to be swaying on the other side.
the reality is a bit complex.
the success
of any prison sentence would be measured in one thing, non-repetition of crime, especially the ones for which he had been convicted for, after he/ she had completed the jail term. For
repetition of crime to subside, reformation of the jailed should be considered. Keeping people behind the bars hardly achieves
objective. If they were ordered to work during their term, they would learn some vocational courses which would help them live a decent living and it earns them respect in the society.
, prisoners, especially those who were convicted
petty crime are
humans and should be treated that way. It is believed that incarcerations help in creating bad company, converting small offenders into rogue elements,
should be avoided.
On the other
hand vocational
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hand, vocational
workshops will create a healthy and productive relationship which they could leverage in the future.
However not
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However, not
all criminals should be treated the same way. Violent and repeat
a person who transgresses moral or civil law
should not be shown any lenience as a token of
the quality of being just or fair
to the victims.
, it will lower the morale of the
society but
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society, but
boosts that of the criminals. In conclusion, I opine that for small or one-time
someone who has committed a crime or has been legally convicted of a crime
, a lenient and productive verdict should be awarded
of archaic torturous sentences.
is not only because of human rights
concerns but
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concerns, but
to create a healthier society.
, hard work sentences improves the skills they need to survive
the time that has elapsed
their release.
, those who commit abhorrent crimes
expresses an emotional, practical, or other reason for doing something
not be treated the same way.

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