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You have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect. Write a letter to the editor of the magazine. In your letter correct the information in the article explain why it is important for the magazine to give correct information suggest what the magazine should do about this situation

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Dear Sir, I am writing
this
 letter in order to warn you that an internationally published tourism magazine I have just read includes some wrong pieces of information about my town, Fethiye. The article which mentions my town claims that the number of hotels in Fethiye is declining
due to
 the financial stagnation in Turkey.
However
, the fact is that three new luxury hotels with approximately seventy rooms per hotel started to serve incomers. Fixing
this
 mistake is crucial for the reputation of the town since tourism serves as a formidable economic powerhouse for people who live here. As long as the real situation is not shared, trips to Fethiye
reduced
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are reduced
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.
Therefore
, I want you to explain
this
 fault and inform readers correctly. Thanks in advance, Ali G.
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Task Achievement
To improve task achievement, ensure all parts of the prompt are fully covered. Although your letter corrects the misinformation and stresses the importance of accuracy, expanding on suggestions for the magazine's actions could provide a more comprehensive response.
Coherence and Cohesion
To enhance coherence and cohesion, consider varying your sentence structures and using a wider range of linking words. This would help in connecting ideas more smoothly and improving the overall flow of the letter.
Task Achievement
You've correctly identified the purpose of the letter—correcting incorrect information about your town.
Coherence and Cohesion
The overall structure of the letter is clear, with a suitable greeting and closing.
Coherence and Cohesion
You have employed paragraphs effectively, dedicating each to a specific aspect of the response.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Rectify
  • Misrepresentation
  • Tourism
  • Editor
  • Credibility
  • Accuracy
  • Local heritage
  • Fact-checking
  • Repercussions
  • Counteractive measures
  • Publishing ethics
  • Clarification
  • Factual error
  • Misconception
  • Authenticity
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