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Some people say that the Internet is bringing people together by making the world smaller. Do you agree that the Internet is making it easier for people to communicate with one another?

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Since its invention, the Internet has affected the way people communicate. Some argue that its influence on the way we communicate is largely negative.
However
, I believe that the Internet has greatly increased the possibilities for interaction. Some people say that even though so much
information
 is available through the Internet, nobody is really processing all
this
information
.
Nevertheless
, everyone would have to agree that the Internet appears to make
communication
 between people much easier. In the past, it was difficult to find out
information
 about organisations and current events.
However
, in modern society most professional organisations have their own websites and events are constantly updated on the Internet.
This
 has meant that receiving
information
 has become a lot easier. Before the Internet age, the only way people could communicate in writing with others was by writing and sending letters. Now, with the invention of internet-based email,
communication
 is fast and cheap. Taking advantage of
this
 development means that people can keep in touch on a more regular basis.
Although
this
 has meant that users now spend long periods of time in front of their computer screens and may not be involved in as much spoken
communication
 as before, I would argue that the Internet has actually increased the amount of
communication
 between people – it is only that the means of
communication
has changed
Suggestion
have changed
 from more spoken language to written
communication
. In summary, it can be seen that the Internet has had a positive effect, giving people the opportunity to communicate more easily and frequently with others.
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