More and more people are becoming seriously overweight. Some people say that the price increase of fattening foods will solve this problem. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Obesity issue has become a major
problem
to the society these days. Adults and even toddlers are becoming hazardously obese to the point, that it affects their health. The government proclaimed that an upsurge in the
price
of the unhealthy
food
will curb
this
serious
problem
. Unfortunately, I strongly disagree the hike in the
price
on
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of
those
food
products will only affect to people in need and doesn’t resolve the
problem
. Overeating is one of the fundamental issues that almost all obese
person
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people
persons
faced. Current studies have been shown that the best ways to keep body fit and healthy are to exercise and proper balanced meal. Eating healthy
food
may help to lose weight, though it must be eaten in a considerable amount. Ironically, overindulging on nutritious
food
can lead to weight gain and possibly even detrimental to health.
Moreover
, increase in
price
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the price
on
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of
food
such
as butter and dairy products, affect towards restaurants owners and low-
incomed
the financial gain (earned or unearned) accruing over a given period of time
income
family. Restaurant and bakery require to
by
obtain by purchase; acquire by means of a financial transaction
buy
a lot of dairy products, sugar and salt to make meals and
this
implementation will only affect their business’s sales.
Furthermore
, it will only make the situation worse for low-income family as it is already a struggle for them to have a decent meal. Despite of the implementation, the target group,
however
, will continue to purchase those ingredients as they couldn’t control their eating habit. In conclusion, it is a matter of fact that the increment in the
food
price
doesn’t prevent
obesity
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the obesity problem
problem
for
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from
growing. Self- control during eating and exercise are the best options for these people to lose their weight effectively.
Submitted by shaktypreya on

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