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People have little understanding of the importance of the natural world, what are the reasons and how can people learn more about the natural world?

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It is true that many people do not realize the functions of our
nature
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. I
analyze
consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
analyse
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 problem in several ways and
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 provide some steps to ease it. There are several reasons for individuals being unfamiliar with the meaning of the natural
world
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. For starters, a large proportion of people are currently living in the cities, where most of
places
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the places
 are modern buildings rather than natural sceneries. Some of them may think that the
nature
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 plays a negligible role in our lives. Another reason is that people are sometimes busy with study or work, and spend less time on caring the planet.
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, it is difficult for them to understand the importance of the natural
world
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. Based on the above analysis, I suggest several practical measures to improve their awareness of
nature
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. As for governments, they should run campaigns to encourage us to know more about the importance of the earth.
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, they could publish some non-commercial ads on TV or the Internet to show what our life would be if we lose the
nature
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. From the perspective of education systems, students should gain better knowledge of the
nature
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,
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, plants can produce oxygen and absorb carbon dioxide. In
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 way, they are likely to pay attention to our natural
world
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 as well as protect it.
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, parents could visit natural sceneries during family trips to know more about their benefits. In conclusion,
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 there are numerous reasons for our lack of the importance of the natural
world
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, I believe that we could tackle
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 problem with the support of governments and education systems, as well as human beings.
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