Due to the development and rapid expansion of supermarket in some countries, many small, local business are unable to compete. Some people think that the closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Impossible competition is
a
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an
opinions
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opinion
about local
business
from some people which is due to the development and rapid expansion of
supermarket
in some countries.
This
can lead to the death of local communities, while I strongly disagree with
this
view for many reasons. Increasing revenue is a benefit for many small and local
business
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businesses
.
Firstly
, if
supermarket
spread
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spreads
around the world, inhabitants of
local area
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the local area
could have a better chance to sell their goods to a greater number of customers since the
supermarket
also
need supply some products and sell to people. Certainly, the local goods
is
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are
more convenient than others because of shipping costs.
For example
, when the Big C Mart, which is one of the biggest
supermarket
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supermarkets
in Vietnam, were established in Vietnam, they open
supermarket
around my country. It means everyone can buy products anywhere they like even the outskirt of
megapolis
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Megapolis
city. Meanwhile, they
sells
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sell
loads of goods base on demand from their customers, as well as these
also
have local products. In order to compete, local
business
also need
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also needs
to best quality and pride which is
also
some advantages. Indeed, while
supermarket
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the supermarket
is developing, local company can be easier to see clearly their opponent.
As a result
, they would invest more money
to
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in
Research and Development Department.
This
can lead to a
best
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better
good
products
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product
which could be interesting in
market
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the market
a market
and attract customers.
Besides
, the establishment of supermarkets can help to feel pride. It can be seen in
this
case where local items
presents
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present
in
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on
shelves of
supermarket
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supermarkets
the supermarket
a supermarket
, thereby enabling rapid expansion around the globe. By doing it,
brand
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the brand
might become popular, as well as local citizens can feel proud to use and speak to foreign people that their country
also
have a famous product. In conclusion, despite supermarkets is developing and rapidly expanding, it does not affect badly to local
business
. It can help them in many ways, including revenue, best quality and pride.
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