some people believe that Government money should be spent on important things rather than arts such as painting and music. To what extent agree or disagree.

Whilst, many individuals think that authority money should be
expend
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expended
on essential objects rather than arts like
music
and painting. In my opinion, spending on
health
and
education
in top priority, but disagree with no funding for
arts
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the arts
. I would discuss about both these views in the following paragraphs. To embark with, there are myriad reason, why I am claiming that authority should be
spent
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spending
money on vital things
such
as
health
and
education
. The
first
and an important reason,
health
is necessary for everyone. These days, diseases are very common, all people suffer from many types of sickness like diabetes, obesity and asthma. For
this
purpose,
Government
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the Government
should be opened more and more hospitals and
health
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
; mankinds may do easily treatment.
Moreover
,
education play
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education, play
vital role in humankind' s life. If humanity will decent educated,
country
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the country
will easily develop. Contrary above to the statement, art is
also
important in
humanity life
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humanity, life
such
as painting and
music
.
Furthermore
, painting
express
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expresses
the emotions of
masses
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the masses
, there is no need learn to any type language
for
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to
understand it.
Thus
, everyone can easily understand it; which has shown in the painting.
In addition
to, melody illustrates the culture's
music
,
instead
of international
music
.
For example
, Vande Matram is
special song
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the special song
a special song
of India since it represents the nation.
Music
creates more opportunities for employment; native can decent earn with the help of
music
.
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At
the conclusion, both are necessary for mankinds. Government should be
spent
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spending
more money on
education
and
health
,
although
also
spending for art but in limit.
Submitted by naresh on

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