Some people think that sports played in teams are better than individual sports. Others don’t think so. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

The enormous advantages of engaging in sporting activities - whether as a professional or for leisure -
can not
can not
cannot
be overemphasised. While some participate in
team
sports
such
as soccer and cricket because of its attendant merits, others believe that getting involved in individual sports e.g.
tennis
Suggestion
Tennis
and golf, have better prospects.
This
essay will discuss both
standpoints but
Accept comma addition
standpoints, but
in consonance with the former.
Firstly
, the most successful and famous sports veterans today emerge from
team
sports
such
as football, basketball and rugby.
This
explains why, in a recent research from an International Sports Institute in Switzerland, 80 percent of
sampled population
Suggestion
the sampled population
of school children between the ages of 8 and 15 confirmed that becoming professional footballers and basketball players as their biggest dream.
Also
, asides being a mutual source of motivation and ideas to one another in a group,
teamplay
also
helps in achieving set goals quickly with minimal efforts. It is sometimes very exhaustive to expend individual effort to achieve a particular task.
For instance
, it will be
an
Suggestion
a
Herculean task for a goalie of a soccer squad to dribble his way into the opponent's net without the supporting effort of his
team
members.
On the contrary
, indecisiveness as well as individual differences which
has recently become
Suggestion
have recently become
rampant with
team
sports, form the basis of
argument
Suggestion
the argument
for the advocates of a one-man
team
.
For instance
, the recent rate at which some (disgruntled) members of football teams across the world form cabals to sabotage the efforts of the whole
team
is quite alarming.
This
is very costly to the
team
as it often results
to
Suggestion
in
loss of concentration for other members and a consequent poor
team
performance. In conclusion, with a more
delibrate
carefully thought out in advance
deliberate
and strategic hire of
team
managers and coaches
skillful
having or showing knowledge and skill and aptitude
skilful
in group dynamics and
team
management, the benefits inherent in playing
team
sports abound compared with playing individual sports. It is in "
Togetherness
Suggestion
Together
, Everyone Achieves More"-
TEAM
.
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