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Recently, it is common for people not to know their neighbours. What is the causes of this problem? What can be done to solve this problem?

#people #neighbours
It has been noted that nowadays, many people usually do not take note of their neighbours.
Although
 there are so many reasons for
this
, solutions are
also
 available. One major reason why people tend not to know their neighbours is the usual daily struggling to make ends meet.
In other words
, humans are becoming much engaged with their work/business, and most individuals do not work from home or nearby, thereby having little time to spend at home especially in the late hours.
Furthermore
, individuals now use their leave periods to travel out of their countries and spend quality times with their families.
For example
, it has been found that many Nigerians are currently leaving their homes to other countries with their families for summer holidays.
Lastly
, in some countries where there are many tribes and religions
such
 as, Nigeria, individuals often avoid associations with others to avoid troubles and misunderstandings. Having stated the major causes, the best solutions to them would certainly start from the governments.
Firstly
, in nations with many tribal and religious differences, the governments should provide for all their citizens irrespective of what group they belong.
This
 goes a long way in expressing the unity of the nation to them
,
Accept space
,
thus
, promoting unity within all
neighbourhood
Suggestion
neighbourhoods
. That said,
law
Suggestion
the law
 should
also
 be made on the working hours of all companies/organisations to suit all workers
,
Accept space
,
and by so doing create adequate space for good family interaction and other activities
such
 as, visiting friends.
Finally
, residents should make it a point of duty to fix dates for yards and community meetings
atleast
Suggestion
at least
 once monthly whereby they talk about some worrying issues, and by so doing create
avenue
Suggestion
an avenue
the avenue
 for knowing one another. In conclusion, it is unbecoming of nearby residents
not to know
Suggestion
don't know
 themselves due to certain reasons,
hence
, all members of the society and the rulers have vital roles to play in providing solutions.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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