Some people think that the most important thing about being rich is it gives a person the opportunity to help other people. Do you agree or disagree?

Wealth is a blessing that everyone desires to have. A number of individuals are of the opinion that the primary significance of it is the ability to be charitable. I completely disagree with
this
view as not all wealthy people like to share their finances, they will rather take care of their needs which is of more importance to them.
Firstly
, charity does not benefit the rich directly as he loses money in the process.
For instance
, a wealthy man who frequently assists people financially has nothing
physical
Suggestion
physically
to gain. He may end up loosing a lot of money in the process and may not even have enough for himself. For
this
reason, giving to charity may not be practiced by
most rich
Suggestion
richer
people, making it less important to them.
Furthermore
, the ability to provide abundantly for their personal and family needs will be the main benefit to these individuals as
this
is what everyone looks out for.
Dangote
, the richest man in Nigeria and Africa is able to completely cater for his family as he sends his children to the best schools and takes good care of them. He is
also
able to purchase the best cars and take trips round the world because of his wealth. All
this
gives a fulfilment of accomplishment and so is of great benefit to him. In conclusion,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
still disagree with the opinion because the rich will gain more from taking care of their needs and not all rich people will like to share their wealth.

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