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Some people think that for individuals, planning for the future is a waste of time. It is more important for individuals to focus on the present. Do you agree or disagree?

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In
this
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 era of globalization, the world has changed drastically in many ways. Due to
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 reason, people these days, pre-planned their
future
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 in the present
time
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.
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, others argue that it is useless to think of what is happening in the
future
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 as being in the now is more important. I strongly disagree with that notion as preparing ahead of
time
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 is as crucial as the present.
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 of all, setting up goals and planning ahead of
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 helps people to adapt every circumstance that they might need to face.
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 is because, they already predicted those setbacks earlier. In
this
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 way, they do not need to worry about any hurdles that they might have to face as they knew the forthcoming.
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, during the economic crisis occurred in 1990, Tun Dr. Mahathir Mohamad, the Prime Minister of Malaysia, knew that
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 crisis will be occur and he already made a feasible solution for the citizen.
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, they will not lose valuable assets and at the same
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, they are becoming more resilient and braver in overcoming in
dire situation
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dire situations
a dire situation
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 that, placing a set of goals helps to boost self- confidence and motivation to do better in their life. There are research evidences showing that those who have
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 plan are more successful than those who did not.
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, it is absolutely beneficial as fully prepare ahead of
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 may aid them to obtain a career of their preference and do not have to undergo unemployment issue. Despite of that,
day dreaming
absentminded dreaming while awake
daydreaming
 about it can be a
problematic
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problem
 if there is no action that follows with it. In conclusion, I strongly advocate that pre-planning the
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 is
beneficial but
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beneficial, but
 at the same
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, should
also
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 concentrate
of
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on
 the now as well.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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