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Due to the development and rapid expansion of supermarkets in some countries, many small, local business are unable to compete. Some people think that the closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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 of the growth of supermarkets in some countries, many local businesses have died out. Some people argue that without local business, local communities will not exist. In my opinion, even though the closure of regional enterprises may bring some difficulties to the local community, it will not endanger their existence. Lack of traditional retail stores in a locality may pose some problems
to
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for
with
 the local population. People have to travel to the nearest shopping
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
 to get the items. It is a more expensive and time consuming activity compared to getting the items from local shops.
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 to
this
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, in case of any emergency, when people do not have much time to waste to get the item, lack of local shops may put them in more trouble.
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, if some visitors turn up unexpectedly, the presence of small stores nearby will help people to treat them adequately. Even though local population
have
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has
 to encounter certain difficulties due to the lack of small retail stores, it will not affect their existence. In the modern society, there are many supermarkets and shopping malls in all towns and cities. And
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, people love to travel to these places and enjoy their shopping. In fact, in the current society, people prefer to buy items from supermarkets and shopping malls as these places offer many facilities
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 as cinema halls and restaurants for people to enjoy. Cheap transportation modes are
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 available to go to nearby shopping
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
. In conclusion,
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 the closure of regional shops may affect the local population negatively to a small extent, it will not threaten their existence.
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