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Learning about deepest arsenal value for those of us living in the present. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#value
Learning is inevitable and is considered a necessity for growth and development. It is often argued that taking previous accounts and experiences
into consideration is of
Suggestion
into consideration is
 no importance to everyone in
this
 new age. I completely disagree with
this
 point of view, because, reflecting on the past helps to avoid mistakes and
also
 helps in evaluating the progress.
To begin
, taking a retrospective look at matters helps an individual to avoid mistakes made previously.
This
 forms the basis of
mentorship
; the mentor guides the
mentee
a unit of time equal to 60 seconds or 1/60th of an hour
minute
 based on past knowledge and experiences.
For instance
, it is very common in medical practice to learn the theories propounded by the pioneers.
This
 is necessary because they form the basis of the profession.
anyone
Suggestion
Anyone
 who does not want to learn about the past is bound to work on a Virgin land which could be very stressful, tiring and time-consuming.
studying
Suggestion
Studying
 about the past will guide you from repeating errors.
Furthermore
, when you take time to look at the past, it will serve as a baseline with
wish
interrogative pronoun, used both substantively and adjectivally, and in direct and indirect questions, to ask for, or refer to, an individual person or thing among several of a class
which
 you can make
comparison
Suggestion
comparisons
a comparison
 and evaluate your progress. How do we ascertain or measure of development, if not by comparing with
past
Suggestion
the past
? To illustrate, new modern cars
been
the state or fact of existing
being
 manufactured to meet up with the current trend. Does modern designs are not just brought out of the blues, rather they are modifications of the older version.
Therefore
, taking the past into account helps to evaluate the success in life. To conclude, I strongly disagree with the standpoint that taking a look into the past is not necessary, rather, I think it helps to prevent errors, as well as evaluating our advancement in life. It is
therefore
 be a routine and continuous practice, not just an occasional event.
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