A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sports team for two years, or to pay for two open-air concerts.It has asked for feedback from the general public. Write a letter to the company. In your letter * Describe the benefits of sponsoring the sports team * Summarize the benefits of paying for the concerts * Say how you think the company should spend the money

Dear Sir, I am writing to you today to provide my feedback about the decision of your company to use the money for the benefit of our community. I would like to put forward some of the
benefits
of sponsoring the
children
's
sports
team
.
Sports
is
the
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one of the best ways for
children
to develop skills like
team
building, planning and handling difficult situations effectively. If your company sponsors the local
children
's
team
, it will
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more and more
number of
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children
to participate in
the
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sports
activities. It will truly help them for their overall development.
However
, there are few
benefits
of having
open air
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concerts
as well
such
as the local food vendors can put up the stall and earn some money. Local bands can participate and showcase their talents. It will help them to get some
promotion
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and bigger opportunities. In my perspective, your company should sponsor the local
children
's
sports
team
as it will drive more
children
towards
sports
. It may inspire
another companies
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also
to do the same. Having
the
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open air
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concerts
is a good idea but the community has already had five
concerts
in the past two years. So to sum it all up,
benefits
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of sponsoring the
children
's
sports
team
outweighs the
benefits
of paying for
open air
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concerts
.
Thanks
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you for your time and consideration. Yours sincerely, Riddhi
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