Some people think that the best wat to reduce crime is to give longer prison sentences. Others, however, believe there are better alternative wats or reducing crime. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

How criminal acts should be punished has been debated for many years. Some may argue that an increased jail
time
would help decrease
crime
rates, whereas others believe that there are other measures which can be more effective. In
this
essay I will discuss both of these views and why I agree that alternative methods are much for effective in reducing
crime
. With regards to longer prison sentences, many believe that
this
is a successful method in decreasing the amount of criminal activity in our society. One reason for
this
view is that imprisonment acts as a deterrent, by which people are separated from their friends and family and their freedom is restricted. A recent study showed that 48% of prisoners were less likely to commit
further
criminal acts due to the fact that they did not want to spend more
time
in jail.
Thus
, a lengthy prison sentence would
further
discourage people from performing
law
breaking acts as they are aware of the consequences if they do so.
Therefore
, an increased jail
time
will provide criminals with an incentive to not break the
law
.
Although
, increasing the duration inhabitants spend in ail may help to discourage them, I believe that
this
is only a short-term gain.
Law breakers
Suggestion
Lawbreakers
need to be educated and taught how to be better
law
bidding citizens in order for
crime
rates to reduce. An example of
this
would be; providing inmates with therapy and educational lessons on why they committed
such
acts and helping them to understand their behaviours and situation, so it will not occur in the future.
This
method will help them to acknowledge their wrong doings and give them a strategy on how to become better people.
Thus
, these alternative methods can be more effective in reducing
criminal
Suggestion
crime
rates. In conclusion,
although
by increasing the amount of
time
law
breakers spend behind bars may discourage them from committing
crime
, I believe that using an alternative approach,
such
as education and therapy, can diminish
crime
activity long term.
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