Some people think that people who are over 60 years old should retire and stop working. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
It is the belief of some people that when a
person
reaches the age of sixty they should Use synonyms
then
begin their retirement and end their careers. I am of the opinion that Linking Words
this
is not the case and that a Linking Words
person
should be able to continue working for a as long as they want or need to. Use synonyms
This
essay shall outline the reasons behind Linking Words
this
point of view.
When a Linking Words
person
reaches the age of sixty they can potentially still be very active and healthy individuals. Use synonyms
Such
people have a lot to offer a company and they may wish to end their careers at Linking Words
such
an age. With ever improving Linking Words
medicinal
practices and healthcare, people are remaining healthier for longer and are Suggestion
medical
therefore
capable of working for longer. Being forced to retire may negatively affect a Linking Words
person
’s mental health and self-esteem. Use synonyms
For instance
, the UK Office for National Statistics suggests that those people who retire early without a purpose for their retirement are at a 57% greater risk of a heart attack in the Linking Words
first
five years of retirement compared to those who retire later when they choose to.
Allied to Linking Words
this
, companies would lose valuable assets for no real reason. A Linking Words
person
who is sixty often has a great deal of Use synonyms
experience
in a company which can be used to train other members of staff or to offer advice to management when appropriate. Losing Use synonyms
this
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experience
unnecessarily could Use synonyms
therefore
have a negative effect on many companies as they may need to pay more money to recruit new people with less Linking Words
experience
. Use synonyms
Indeed some
companies Accept comma addition
Indeed, some
such
as Walmart are famous for valuing older employees as they make fewer mistakes and are generally more reliable than their younger counterparts.
To summarise, the valuable Linking Words
experience
of older employees allied to the potential negative impacts on those people if they are forced to retire mean that forcing people to retire against their will is not a positive step forward. Governments should ensure that everyone has the right to work as long as they are physically and mentally capable of doing so safely.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite