Some people believe that the best way to improve public health is by increasing sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

How to improve public
health
is debatable. Some think that building more sports
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
centres
is the way to achieve good
health
. Others,
however
, opine that
its
it is
it's
ineffective and other steps are necessary too. In my opinion,
although
, settling new fitness clubs is an effective tool to attain good
health
, but healthy eating and adapting active lifestyle are equally important.
To begin
with, it is an undeniable fact, if more sports facilities are available, people will be enticed to do regular
excercises
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercise
. Which in turn will keep them healthy and active. Due to busy city life, too long working hours, an office worker finds it hard to grab more
courrage
a quality of spirit that enables you to face danger or pain without showing fear
courage
courageous
carriage
and head towards a gym which may several blocks away from his
dewelling
housing that someone is living in
dwelling
.
This
discourrages
try to prevent; show opposition to
discourages
joining sports facilities,
hence
people prefer crashing
infront
Suggestion
in front
of a television at home than going fitness club. If workout equipments are installed in community parks, people would be more likely to do physical
excercises
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercises
exercise
and as result
comunity
a group of people living in a particular local area
community
health
wil
the capability of conscious choice and decision and intention
will
be better.
Secondly
, dining at fast food restaurants has become a trend. Fast food
caffes
a small restaurant where drinks and snacks are sold
cafes
serve
diet which
Accept comma addition
diet, which
is rich in fat and calories. It increases triglycerides level in blood and poses
serious risk
Suggestion
a serious risk
for heart diseases, obesity and other comorbidities.
Hence
, eating healthy, organic and getting rid of sedentary lifestyle is crucially important to
acheive
to gain with effort
achieve
total well being.
For example
, international disease
center
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
Center
research revealed that, due to
chinese
a native or inhabitant of Communist China or of Nationalist China
Chinese
people preferably
Accept comma addition
people, preferably
consuming vegetables and eating at least 4 hours before going to bed, has greatly reduced their chances of getting obese and has increased life expectancy. To conclude, people may vary in their opinion, but
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
strongly advocate a daily
excercise
the activity of exerting your muscles in various ways to keep fit
exercise
, healthy eating and changing lifestyle will have paramount effective in improving public
health
, enabling us
living
Suggestion
to live
in disease free communities.
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