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The chart below shows the number of travellers using three major airports in New York City between 1995 and 2000.

The chart below shows the number of travellers using three major airports in New York City between 1995 and 2000.
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The bar chart illustrates information about the
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amount
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number
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 of people who visited three main airports in new york city in a period of six
years
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 from 1995 to 2000. First of all.The
number
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 of
passenger
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passengers
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 has increased
by
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over
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 the
years
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.In 1995, LaGuardia
airport
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 has the largest
number
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 of visitors nearly 35
million
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.
While
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Newark
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airport
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 has the lowest
amount
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 of travellers with slightly over
than
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apply
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10
millions
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million
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.In 1997, John F. Kennedy
airport
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 has just less than 50
millions
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million
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 passenger followed by LaGuardia
airport
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 slightly ahead
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Newark
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of Newark
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airport
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 with
approimately
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approximately
 4
millions
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million
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 travellers.The
number
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 of LaGuardia
airport
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 passengers. In 2000, was the highest
nubmer
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number
 during the whole six
years
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 almost 70
million
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.Both
of
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John F. Kennedy
airport
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 and
Newark
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airport
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 had a similar
amount
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 of
visitor
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visitors
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 in 2000, around 40
million
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 more or less. In conclusion.
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 the chart,
Newark
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airport
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 had the lowest
number
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 of visitors during the
years
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 even though the
amount
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 has improved from almost 20
million
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 in 1995 to over
than
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40
million
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 in 2000.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, years, number, airport, million, newark with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • significant increase
  • highest number
  • steady increase
  • largest growth
  • dramatic
  • slowest growth
  • slight decrease
  • gradual increase
  • period
  • travelers
  • major airports
  • followed by
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