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In some areas of the US, a curfew is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion about this?

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In few cities of America, the law of
curfew
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 prohibits the movement of the younger people, especially at nights. While the primary purpose of a
curfew
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 is to stop igniting the individuals from creating more protests, teens’ roaming at
night
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 without the company of any guardian is not permitted by the US government. I,
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, slightly agree with the notion of not allowing a certain aged-people to be outside. Ban solely on the movement of teenagers during
night
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 time in a dangerous situation doesn’t generate any fruitful outcomes.
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,
economic situation
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the economic situation
 of a country gets affected because many people, who are students, can’t work anymore in a
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-shift duty. As an illustration, a growing number of Indian
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 restaurants made a full-stop in their business for not finding any cheap yet energetic
labors
a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labours
 during a long 6-month
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in
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at
 2015.
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, the provisions of the arrangements have to be clarified before putting an abrupt decision. Of crucial importance, in my opinion, is that student-led movements tend to be
occurred
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occurring
 at a regular basis in
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.
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, as the young generation is not calm as the matured adult, the rates of occurrence
by
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of
 teenagers seems to be quite higher.
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, 75% of the crime rate caused by less aged citizens when the Bangladesh authority did not put any regulation on the teens.
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, parents should be with their children when they are outside at
curfew
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 nights. Will the policy of a
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 speak louder than violence? To conclude with, I’m inclined to restate that more man-made incidents will be inevitable if allowing the young minds out of their houses at
night
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 remains in charge.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enforce
  • juvenile
  • repercussions
  • autonomy
  • adolescence
  • paternalistic
  • delinquency
  • municipality
  • ordinance
  • authoritarian
  • peer pressure
  • social dynamics
  • civil liberties
  • community policing
  • preventative measures
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