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Some people say that E- books and modern technology will totally replace traditional newspaper and magazines to what extent do you agree or disagree.

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In the era of electronic powering
devices taking
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devices, taking
 over the role of delivering
content
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 to people, some may say, it is possible that newspapers and magazines will cease to
exsist
have an existence, be extant
exist
 in the near future.
This
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 essay will tell you why. Tablets readers allow
content
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cusumers
a person who uses goods or services
consumers
 to receive the latest news within a blink of an eye, which is exactly people need. Traditionally, the newspaper firms produce their news one day before the end reader sees it,
therefore
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, no matter how fast they are, the
content
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 shows up the other day will be always outdated.
Such
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sutition
the general state of things; the combination of circumstances at a given time
situation
 has been completely eliminated
when it comes electronic
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when it comes to electronic
 devices.
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, the president of
United States
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the United States
, Donald Trump can post a message on Twitter, within seconds, his followers would be reading and talking
accordingly
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, which on the other side,
no body
a person of no influence
nobody
 want to talk about yesterday’s news via a piece of paper. By presenting
content
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 on advancing equipments in the 21th centre, people can produce and
percive
to become aware of through the senses
perceive
perceives
perceived
 information in a whole new level, which made them ditch the old fashion way to consume
contents
Suggestion
content
. The newest Apple products can host
color
a visual attribute of things that results from the light they emit or transmit or reflect
colour
 dots within a frame of 2880 times 1440
pixles
(computer science) the smallest discrete component of an image or picture on a CRT screen (usually a colored dot)
pixels
, which means more explicit screen projecting,
therefore
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, better gauging experiences. Which explains why people would love to see pictures on a screen
rather
a person who enjoys reading
reader
 on static papers. More
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, with the trend of technology developing speed, those advantages will only go stronger and stronger. In conclusion, the
morden
belonging to the modern era; since the Middle Ages
modern
 technologies
has won
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have won
 over
content
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 consumers by its nature to fast information delivery and high
resolutional
a formal expression by a meeting; agreed to by a vote
resolution
 eyes projecting, the future will
favor
promote over another
favour
 the tech more and more.
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