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Nowadays, more people are choosing to socialise online than face to face . Is this a positive or negative development?

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In
this
 modern technical era, socialising by social media,
such
 as Facebook, Twitter, Instagram, and so on is a massive trend among the majority of the masses.
However
, in my opinion, it is a negative development of the modern world. To initiate with, users of
such
 media get entangled in the virtual world and it makes an adverse impact on their personal social
life
, people can get in touch with the person who lives far away from
them but
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them, but
 they do not know the person who lives
next
 to their door due to the less communication with them. Communicating online than that of face to face can
also
 increase the feeling of insecurity because, by
virtual type
Suggestion
the virtual type
 of communication, one
can not
can not
cannot
 get a personal sense very profoundly.
Therefore it
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Therefore, it
 became a significant factor in
increasing trust issue
Suggestion
the increasing trust issue
. More
consideringly
, making a friend by social media is in trend as well, there are a plethora of fake accounts occupied a prominent place on all the social media websites.
Consequently
, a cyber crime
such
 as blackmailing, cheating, scamming are increased significantly.
In addition
 to
this
, getting depressed and stressful
life
 is some other consequences of colossal socialising by practical methods. In conclusion, socialising online has a lot of consequences,
such
 as getting cheated. , effects on personal and social
life
, scarcity of interest in
real
Suggestion
real life relationships
life
 relationship,
therefore
 it leads to a negative development.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social media platforms
  • online interactions
  • virtual communication
  • global community
  • interpersonal skills
  • digital divide
  • cyberspace
  • virtual presence
  • social networking
  • mental wellbeing
  • digital literacy
  • safe spaces
  • marginalized groups
  • face-to-face communication
  • socialisation
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