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Some people say that the Internet is making the world smaller by bringing people together. To what extent do you agree that the internet is making it easier for people to communicate with one another?

#people #internet #world
Communication plays a vital role in each
one
 of us lives. It makes us know better, how the
world
 is modifying and progressing. I totally agree with the question given, where in
Internet
Suggestion
the Internet
 is taking
world
Suggestion
the world
 by storm. I will emphasize going forward, to what extent Internet transformed people`s lives by connecting each other.
First
 of all, I define Internet as a communication. It basically acts a
conneting
connect, fasten, or put together two or more pieces
connecting
 medium among two electronic computing devices.
Futhermore
in addition
Furthermore
, it brings all devices on earth to
one
 common platform. As we know, many of us tend to know how
outside
Suggestion
the outside world
world
 is acting, It helps them to explore every possible tip of
outside
Suggestion
the outside world
world
.
For Instance
, Recently, when Kerala Floods occurred, Videos shared on Social Networking sites the
affectees
property of a personal character that is portable but not used in business
effects
 of Floods uploaded, it awakened the humanity across the
world
 and made them to extend their helping hands by donating them with new living. To Continue with,
World
 is progressing very fast and to keep in pace,
one
 should follow new trends and developments and here comes the Internet
on
Suggestion
in
 the
first
 place to go. Some of the communicating
mobiles
Suggestion
mobile
 applications have
diverse porfolio
Suggestion
a diverse portfolio
diverse portfolio
, from social media to short news apps, from
Youtube
Suggestion
YouTube
 Videos to Facebook, From Mail Services to Short Messaging services making
World
 small and accessible to connect each other. To Conclude with, Internet which includes fast Emerging Technologies, Social Media, and other communicating
Applictions
the act of bringing something to bear; using it for a particular purpose
applications
 satisfying the diverse interests of the people on earth and
thus
brining
the act of delivering or distributing something (as goods or mail)
bringing
 them on
one
 platform, uniting them to make
world
Suggestion
the world
 significantly smaller.
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