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Some people say that the Internet is making the world smaller by bringing people together. To what extent do you agree that the internet is making it easier for people to communicate with one another?

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Communication plays a vital role in each one of us lives. It makes us know better, how the
world
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 is modifying and progressing. I totally agree with the question given, where
in
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on
 the Internet is taking
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world
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the world
 by storm. I will emphasize going forward, to what extent the Internet transformed people`s lives by connecting each other.
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 of all, I define Internet as a communication. It basically acts a connecting medium among two electronic computing devices.
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, it brings all devices on earth to one common platform. As we know, many of us tend to know how the outside
world
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 is acting, sharing their content and changing its
colors
a flag that shows its nationality
colours
.
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, Recently, when Kerala Floods occurred, Videos shared on Social Networking sites the impact of Floods being uploaded, it awakened the humanity across the
world
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 and made them to extend their helping hands by donating them with new living.
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,
World
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 is progressing very fast and to keep in pace, one should follow new trends and developments and here comes the Internet in the
first
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 place to go.
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, Some of the communicating mobile applications have a diverse portfolio, from social media to short news apps, from YouTube Videos to Facebook, From Mail Services to Short Messaging services making
World
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 small and accessible to connect each other. To Conclude with, Internet which includes fast Emerging Technologies, Social Media, and other communicating Applications satisfying the diverse interests of the people on earth and
thus
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 bringing them on
single platform
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a single platform
, uniting them to make the
World
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 significantly smaller.
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