A growing number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans,while others argue that humans must employ animals to satisfy their various needs,including uses for food and research. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

many
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Many
people consider  that humans should not take advantage of animals and even animals should be given
same rights
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the same rights
as humans. Whereas, other people debate that humans ought to use animals for their many needs
,
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including for
food
and doing research.In my opinion, I believe that humans must use animals for fulfilment of their needs.         Humans are obligated to depend on animals for many requirements in daily life as there are limited resources on earth.
For instance
, agricultural products can not suffice the demand of
food
for
whole population
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the whole population
on
earth so
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earth, so
humans are ought to depend on animals for their supplies. In a recent study it is estimated that more than 60 percent of people depend on animals for their
food
, almost
everyday
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every day
.Even in research
feild
a piece of land cleared of trees and usually enclosed
fields
failed
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,
scientists need to test their newly developed drugs and vaccines before they can introduce it to the world.
For
example consider
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example, consider
monoclonal
antibodies
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antibody
technique in which antigen is injected into an animal and the antibodies produced in its body are collected and used to treat the diseases in humans.    
On the other hand
,
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,
if humans give up being
dependant
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dependent
depend
on animals for their needs and animal
also
are given equal rights
,
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,
then
it will be highly impossible for humans to survive as they depend on animals especially for
food
and experiments.
Neverthless
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Nevertheless
,
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,
animals should not be misused like in public shows like
circus
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the circus
and other shows which are exhibited merely for entertainment and earning money.
For example
,
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,
Kangaroo Boxing in many countries is very well entertained.And
also
animals should not be locked in cages in zoos for
longer period
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a longer period
longer periods
of time
,
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,
so that they can have their free time as even they have emotions and feel the pain.   In conclusion, I opine to say that humans must  use animals for their many
needs especially
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needs, especially
for
food
,
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,
research and experiments.
Inspite
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In spite
of
this
misuse of animals like in zoos
,
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,
shows should be discouraged.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Exploitation
  • Animal welfare
  • Ethical treatment
  • Vegetarianism
  • Veganism
  • Cognitive dissonance
  • Humane
  • Live stock
  • Cruelty-free
  • Bioethics
  • Conservation
  • Habitat preservation
  • Ecosystem
  • Biodiversity
  • Animal testing
  • Synthetic biology
  • Genetic engineering
  • Speciesism
  • Animal husbandry
  • Sustainable farming
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