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Some people prefer to shop for food in supermarkets. Other people prefer to do their food shopping online. Discuss on both views and give your opinion.

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Large supermarkets have recently introduced online grocery shopping. While many shoppers do their
food
 shopping online, many still tend to prefer shopping the traditional way by visiting the
supermarket
.
This
 essay will discuss why online
food
 shopping has its
benefits but
Accept comma addition
benefits, but
 why traditional
food
 shopping is ultimately superior. Online
food
 shopping is certainly an efficient way to complete what many people consider to be a laborious chore. A person can click through a website and have
food
 delivered - within a short period of
time
 – to one’s door. As an example, a major
supermarket
 in Australia promises a three-hour turnaround
time
 in grocery delivery. Being able to shop online saves busy people the unnecessary hassle of having to visit a
supermarket
. But not everyone needs to save
time
 and visiting a
supermarket
 can be an extremely positive
experience
. Walking through the aisles, allows one to choose from a vast array of different products and to decide exactly what goes into the shopping basket.
For example
, think about the variety of different vegetables available at the
supermarket
. It is enjoyable selecting the best avocado form the pile. It goes without saying the
supermarket
 shopping, if you have
time
, it can be
pleasurable
Suggestion
a pleasurable experience
experience
. With the introduction of online
food
 shopping, traditional routines are being challenged.
This
 essay discussed why online
food
 shopping can be
extremely efficient process but
Suggestion
an extremely efficient process, but
an extremely efficient process but
extremely efficient processed but
 why shopping at the
supermarket
 in person can be a pleasurable
experience
. In my opinion visiting a
supermarket
 offers a superior
experience
 to online shopping.
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