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It is becoming more and more difficult to escape the influence of the media on our lives. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of living in a media _rich society.

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Nowadays, it is true that the development of media
make
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makes
 our lives improved and more convenient. It
also
 means our lives are influenced deeply by many sorts of media. A multiple systems of them yield us advantages as well as disadvantages There are several positive impacts
from
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of
 the media.
Firstly
, we can communicate to others over the world
by
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of
 social media. We are able to connect to our friends or our partners who are miles away from us just within few minutes. The sites
also
 give us opportunities to connect strangers in far-distant place who share similar interests.
Secondly
, the diversification of media
such
 as television, magazines or internet,
etc
continuing in the same way
etc.
make
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makes
news spread
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the news spread
to
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of
 common people rapidly and attract attention.
For instance
, the broadcast of bad weather is informed to us quickly for precaution so that we can deal with that problem effectively. The media is
also
 a source which offer people with a wealth of knowledge. We can find out any needed information what is helpful for our work or study on FB or YouTube channel.
Moreover
, with the growth of
internet
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the internet
 and social page media, all citizens and governments are able to join in and give opinions on social problems as well as interact with draft policies.
Thus
, the issues of society are solved better.
In addition
, the electric media makes E-commerce developed, we can purchase anything on online service through smartphone and we
save
cut with a saw
saw
 plenty of out time.
On the other hand
, the modern media systems trigger some drawbacks. The unreliable information
are spread
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is spread
 quickly, they cause misleading stories and be the negative effect on
social problem
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social problems
. The other aspect of disadvantage is that people usually spend their free time on
enjoy
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enjoying
 media. In
family
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the family
families
, children surf the internet while parents watch tv, the interaction of people by face to face in less, So the gap between generations is more widened.
Furthermore
, there are many poor quality images or film on tv channel and social media where children can get access to in easily, that affects to educate of younger. To sum up, it is no doubt that we live in a modern world with media-rich society, we should consider to user media effectively and not let our life depend on it quietly.
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