TOPIC : Some people say that private schools should not be allowed to exist. Why do people believe this? What is your opinion.

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Students these days are found to
enroll
register formally as a participant or member
enrol
in most of the non-governmental schools. To some people, these private schools should be banned.
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viewpoint and
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I will tell my perspective on
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matter. One of the main reasons that people are not in favour of running a non-governmental institute is that the fee structure is very expensive. These schools often tend to take a large amount of donation from the parents for their children’s entry. The school authority literally pressurizes the parents by taking loads of money in the name of
tution
a fee paid for instruction (especially for higher education)
tuition
fees, sports fee, extra-curricular activities and so on.
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, the syllabus and the curriculum may not follow a definite pattern and henceforth, jeopardizes the student’s learning process.
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, they will campaign and advertise featuring world class infrastructure and student friendly environment
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which may be very deceptive. People
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, gets tempted with the adverts and automatically fall into the trap as they wish their children to receive the best education ever.
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, the school may be virtually present and in the real circumstances the people running the governing body may turn out to be
fraud
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a fraud
and abscond with the money causing
pychological
mental or emotional as opposed to physical in nature
psychological
trauma to the parents. Out of
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belief, the parents have decided that private schools should not be granted the permission of running as an autocratic body. In my opinion, I agree
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viewpoint since
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gets deviated to the attractive adverts and the showy infrastructure
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the truth often gets submerged about the actual scenario. They
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at the cost of their
life time
the period during which something is functional (as between birth and death)
lifetime
savings get into debt by the high fee requirement of the private schools. All the more, the school entirely can turn out to be
fraud
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a fraud
and actually may not exist.
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