People sleep less than before in many countries. Why do people sleep less? What effects does it have on individual and on society?

It has been reported in
number
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a number
of studies that sleeping habits of residents of handful countries are going through
change
. Following paragraphs will be
penned
make a sweeping movement
panned
pinned
to establish the reasons causing
this
change
, followed by the consequences
it
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it, change
change
has on a personal level and on the community.
Change
is inevitable, whether it is for good or bad, whether it is liked or disgusted by
majority
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the majority
a majority
majorities
, it is there since the origin of life on earth and it is solely responsible for where
humantiy
the quality of being humane
humanity
stands now. With the invention of electricity, nightlife of people is changed forever. Before
this
precious invention, mankind was dependent on sunlight to execute most of its chores,
however now
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however, now
that dependence is a story of
past
Suggestion
the past
, thanks to
electric
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electricity
supply. Now people have more freedom to plan their day and night as life will not sleep with
sun
Suggestion
the sun
, but a new life will begin
called
Suggestion
calling
to call
nightlife. Now a
days
Suggestion
day
, there is a strong possibility to stay late at night due to many factors,
for example
to have a dinner party or hosting a music and dance gathering, it can
also
be due to shopping or just wandering in the surroundings to have a view of city lights. All of
foresaid reasons
Suggestion
the aforesaid reasons
aforesaid reasons
forced reasons
leads
Suggestion
lead
to lack of sleep as people will not go to bed with the end of the day and continue their activities in artificial light.
This
, of
course is
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course, is
not without effects, many studies discovered that people are suffering from sleep deprivation
that is
ultimately impacting their health, as a for
human body
Suggestion
the human body
to perform effectively, a certain amount of sleep is vital. It is
also
having effects on society as some segments of community can not afford to be awake late at night,
for example
, school going children and people who have to report in early shift at work. To conclude, it is pertinent to note that
although
change
is important for progress and sleeping patterns of society are changing with the invention of electricity,
nevertheless
, the state has the responsibility to manipulate it in t
he fa
promote over another
favour
vor
of mas
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the masses
ses
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