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Are famous people treated unfairly by the media? Should they be given more privacy, or is the price of their fame an invasion into their private life? Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #media #privacy #price #fame #invasion #life
Celebrities are those, who has done some amazing job in their job. Nowadays,
media
Suggestion
the media
 tend to focus on those people, in order to
acheive
to gain with effort
achieve
 highest TRP rating's. In
this
 process, they are creating some
inconvience
an inconvenient discomfort
inconvenience
 to them. Lets discuss in detail in the latter part. Coming to
topic
Suggestion
the topic
, treating famous people unfairly, it became common in the present situation. Television generalist, try to cover personal matter's of
welknown
widely or fully known
well-known
 personalities, so that they increase their channel viewers. In
this
 process, they are creating problem's to them and so times it's cost their
life
.
For Example
, Princess Diana, we all know about her
life
 and tragedy ending. So these people are not interested them to poke into their
life
, means they need some privacy. If TV has done as her per wish,
then
 the situation would have
been in other way
Suggestion
been another way
been in another way
. Most of the common man
wish
Suggestion
wishes
 to know about their
favorate
something regarded with special favor or liking
favourite
 personality
life
. It's the responsibility of
reknown
tending to impart new life and vigor to
renewing
 individual, to set the barrier to the media and those who cross it, should be legally punished. On the other side, some of the actors should be careful before
media
Suggestion
the media
. They should cross their limit in order to get popular in
public
Suggestion
the public
. In conclusion, News
repoters
a person who investigates and reports or edits news stories
reporters
 should cover the
life
 of
acheiver's but
Accept comma addition
archives, but
archives but
 with permission from them. It is not the channel's to be in
control but
Accept comma addition
control, but
also
 the famous personalities.
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