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Are famous people treated unfairly by the media? Should they be given more privacy, or is the price of their fame an invasion into their private life? Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #media #privacy #price #fame #invasion #life
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Celebrities are those, who has done some amazing job in their job. Nowadays,
media
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the media
 tend to focus on those people, in order to
acheive
to gain with effort
achieve
 highest TRP rating's. In
this
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 process, they are creating some
inconvience
an inconvenient discomfort
inconvenience
 to them. Lets discuss in detail in the latter part. Coming to
topic
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the topic
, treating famous people unfairly, it became common in the present situation. Television generalist, try to cover personal matter's of
welknown
widely or fully known
well-known
 personalities, so that they increase their channel viewers. In
this
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 process, they are creating problem's to them and so times it's cost their
life
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.
For Example
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, Princess Diana, we all know about her
life
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 and tragedy ending. So these people are not interested them to poke into their
life
Use synonyms
, means they need some privacy. If TV has done as her per wish,
then
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 the situation would have
been in other way
Suggestion
been another way
been in another way
. Most of the common man
wish
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wishes
 to know about their
favorate
something regarded with special favor or liking
favourite
 personality
life
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. It's the responsibility of
reknown
tending to impart new life and vigor to
renewing
 individual, to set the barrier to the media and those who cross it, should be legally punished. On the other side, some of the actors should be careful before
media
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the media
. They should cross their limit in order to get popular in
public
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the public
. In conclusion, News
repoters
a person who investigates and reports or edits news stories
reporters
 should cover the
life
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 of
acheiver's but
Accept comma addition
archives, but
archives but
 with permission from them. It is not the channel's to be in
control but
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control, but
also
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 the famous personalities.
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